Showing posts with label novels. Show all posts
Showing posts with label novels. Show all posts

Friday, 23 November 2012

Let's begin

**WARNING - Bad language ahead!!**


So, the blog serial is finalised and complete (by the way, I changed my mind about the POV today – hahaha!).  What’s next?

Well, I’m glad you asked.  Next is to edit and finish a second draft of my second novel, Matter Of Time (working title).  This should have been finished about four months ago...or next Friday (not going to happen), so now I’m hoping to complete by the end of January at the latest.  Fingers crossed...

Quite a lot needs doing.  I wrote the first half of the novel a long time ago, paused to write The-Novel-Formerly-Known-As-Silver and then returned to it having learnt a lot and with new ideas.  So now I need to work on the join and update the beginning.  Not to mention all of the ideas I’ve had since finishing the first draft which now need incorporating.

After marking out on my trusty Word document the paragraphs that needed work and where new bits could be inserted, I then zoomed out of the document and noticed that I may, possibly, be head hopping.

As Bobby Singer would say, balls.











The other day I opened up the document with new vigour and stared at the first sentence.  I immediately closed the document and haven’t opened it since.

The first line is; It was raining.

Not the best first line...

A first line should grip the reader, get them asking questions and force them to read on.

So today I decided to face the music and reopen the novel.  It’s in desperate need of a new beginning.
I’ve been having a ‘down’ week and so the creative juices are not exactly flowing so I thought a little research would help.

I was looking for great first lines but ended up just looking at the first lines from my favourite books;

‘Logen plunged through the trees, bare feet slipping and sliding on the wet earth, the slush, the wet pine needles, breath rasping in his chest, blood thumping in his head.’ 
– The Blade Itself by Joe Abercombie (the first chapter is also brilliantly called The End.  Oh, and I love Logen!)

‘I, Lucifer, Fallen Angel, Prince of Darkness, Bringer of Light, Ruler of Hell, Lord of the Flies, Father of Lies, Apostate Supreme, Tempter of Mankind, Old Serpent, Prince of This World, Seducer, Accuser, Tormentor, Blasphemer, and without doubt the Best Fuck in the Seen and Unseen Universe (ask Eve, that minx) have decided – oo-la-la! – to tell all.’ 
– I, Lucifer by Glen Duncan

‘”Too old for this shit,” muttered Craw, wincing at the pain in his dodgy knee with every other step.’ 
 – The Heroes by Joe Abercrombie (not one of my favourite books but a very engaging first line).

‘The smuggler held the bullet between thumb and  forefinger, studying it in the weak light of the store room.’ 
 – Retribution Falls by Chris Wooding

‘Hello.  My name is Anubis.  I like long walks on the beach, carrying departed souls into the underworld, and the cinema of Mr. Woody Allen.’ 
– Divine Misfortune by A Lee Martinez (again, not one of my favourites but these first lines made me buy the book).

‘The most important things are the hardest things to say.’ 
– The Body by Stephen King (and my favourite book ever, in the whole world).

‘First the colours.
Then the humans.
That’s usually how I see things.
Or at least, how I try.’ 
– The Book Thief by Markus Zusak

‘It occurs to Brian Blake as he huddles in the musty darkness, the terror constricting his chest, the pain throbbing in his knees: If only he possessed a second pair of hands, he could cover his own ears, and maybe block out the noise of human heads being demolished.’ 
 – Rise of the Governor by Robert Kirkman and Jay Bonansinga

‘Some things start before other things.’ 
 – Wee Free Men by Terry Pratchett (read this book!).

‘One of the luckiest accidents in my wife’s life is that she happened to marry a man who was born on the 26th of September.’ 
– The Midwich Cuckoos by John Wyndham


What are your favourite first lines?

Friday, 24 February 2012

The need for impartial feedback



Well, this is supposed to be the blog of a writer.  You wouldn’t think it would you?  But I am honestly doing things behind the scenes; I’m editing my hopefully debut novel Silver and I am entering short story competitions as often as possible.  I just haven’t been able to put anything up here yet but I hope to change that.

In light of this, I would like to write a review of a fairly new writing tool used by mainly readers and new writers; Authonomy.com.  Authonomy is a community website run by HarperCollins where writers can upload a minimum of 10,000 words of their book for the community to read and comment.

Readers can ‘back’ the book, giving the book a higher rating.  The higher the books rating the higher the chances of the book being chosen to go to the editors of HarperCollins for a review and possibly publishing contract.

When I first heard about this I thought it was a wonderful idea.  I had just finished my second draft of Silver and desperately needed some feedback from people who didn’t know me or wanted to spare my feelings.  So I signed up.

Uploading your book is the first challenge.  It took me a long time to upload seven chapters and I soon discovered that weekends are not the best time to try this.  Authonomy.com is obviously a very popular community and HarperCollins should perhaps look into getting more bandwidth.

I waited and waited and waited for the comments to come in.  But that isn’t how Authonomy works.  In order to get feedback on your work, you must give feedback on others.  This is crucial.  It is a tit for tat system.  Some people resort to spamming and my message inbox is full of messages from strangers asking to be my friend, saying they love the blurb of my book (not enough to read it though), oh and by the way, would I take a look at their book?  I’ve also received similar messages asking for ‘chapter swaps’.  This is how Authonomy.com works, which is fine, if you’re at home all day, which I am not.  I tried to swap chapter reads and I tried to find books to comment on but after only a few I began to struggle for time.

I have about 6 comments on Silver in all.  All of them are book swaps.   I read their first chapters so they read mine.  No stranger actually read past the first chapter (what is more depressing is that no close, personal friends have even attempted it.  That led to a long weekend of depression).

Getting to the editors desk isn’t quite how it sounds either.  No one to date has actually been picked up by HarperCollins through this website.  While it is very helpful to get a professional review and  this would help with securing an agent, it will not result in a publishing contract.  HarperCollins have also closed submissions for new writers.  Authonomy.com is basically their slush pile and so far no one has been successful.

I find it hard to see the point of pushing my novel when I won’t necessarily get a publishing contract or any sales out of it.  I have some very helpful comments so I decided to stop any pushing and just go with what I had.

I took the comments for my first chapter and I am working through Silver, using these comments to edit and refine every chapter.  I received some good advice, some bad advice and some useless advice.
My personal advice on receiving feedback is to go with your gut.  If you read a comment and you know deep down that they’re right, then make the change.  If you completely disagree with them then keep your writing as it is.   This is your book and you shouldn’t have to change anything that you don’t want to (unless maybe your agent or publisher tell you to, of course!).

Authonomy is a good idea and works for a lot of people.  I’m hoping that it will work for me as I refine my novel before sending it out to agents.  Ultimately, it can be a great community website for those that way inclined and it works excellently as HarperCollins’ slush pile, giving them easy access to writers from all over the world and people reading and rating books so that they don’t have to.

 I’ve learnt a lot through using it but I won’t be using it again.  It’s time consuming and can easily become an addiction.  What with Facebook and a large number of favourite television programmes, films to watch and books to read, I just don’t have the time for another addiction, especially one that will probably not amount to much.

I should also mention that I have tried numerous times now to delete my book from Authonomy but the website always crashes.  I’m not sure whether to be angry about this or to think that fate is trying to tell me to put some effort into getting it noticed instead of giving up.

You don’t have to be a writer to be involved in Authonomy.  If you’re a reader or writer, check it out and see what you think.